Whambulance
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Post by Whambulance on Jun 24, 2014 23:46:58 GMT -6
I don't normally ask for straight up feedback like this, because either one of two things happen. Either I get no feedback or I get the generic you did a good job with it type of feed back. I'm looking for some insightful critism about my rps, because obviously while I have found them to be some of my best for Sam (the last two, not my first) in recent memory something is going terribly awry. As they aren't hitting the mark that I would hope that they would. So if you any of you have anything that could help me out in the slightest bit I would very much appreciate it.
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Post by White Satan on Jun 25, 2014 0:07:45 GMT -6
Here are a few tips from someone who has had to read and judge your RPs from the start.
1) In a fed where the score card gives 15 points for match focus, your promos are a little lacking. I'm not saying they're horrible, they just don't do a lot for me.
2) I don't think your character development is bad. It's pretty decent.
Overall, I think you need to find some sort of alignment to run with. You pander too much to be a heel, but the character does little to make me sympathize with her to be a face. Honestly, I'm apathetic at best toward the character. What really turned me off on the character is that she comes off like a shit ton of ridiculous characters that have some incredibly wealthy back story and basically "slum it" by competing in pro wrestling. If she's so rich, why does she compete? Not everyone here knows GDW history, so you have to have some form of explanation to all of this, otherwise she's just a character with a bloated move set that is indyriffic and a generic character that's rather cookie cutter.
Long story short: I need a reason to care about this character, because right now I don't.
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