Dave
Rising Star
Posts: 185
|
Post by Dave on May 30, 2013 12:49:41 GMT -6
I am pretty much just getting started with Sylar and with my mission to make him an interesting character If you have read my "The Less Known Evil" roleplay, do you have anything to say about it? What was "yay", what was "meh" and what can be improved next time? Hit me with your best shot.
|
|
|
Post by THE MANLIEST MAN ON THE PLANET on Jun 15, 2013 20:33:37 GMT -6
Gonna give a little feedback on your last piece.
I really do think you are on the verge of something great with the character. I thought this RP was a step in the right direction for you. I loved the fact that Sylar was pissed with recent results, it really added another element to the character.
But I do think something is missing in your work. Just needs a tad more flavour. An extra killer paragraph to the promo, painting the scene a little more, a touch more dialogue within the scene to add some character. You are REALLY close to something GREAT. Just that little extra could really boost you!
|
|
Dave
Rising Star
Posts: 185
|
Post by Dave on Jun 16, 2013 7:42:37 GMT -6
Thanks a lot for this feedback!
|
|