Angry Pete
Rookie
And the sign said long haired freaky people need not apply...
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Post by Angry Pete on Dec 6, 2013 5:35:22 GMT -6
Only for my first RP and then I go from there and work it out for myself. Here is A Vulgar Display Of Generosity which is part backstory to how Geese and Angry Pete met, half shoot style promo. I understand this is quite long for a first time RP but when I join a fed I look at the standards of the champions and shoot for trying to be close or better than that mark. Here, I fell short but I'm not used to writing this much. SO, let me have it. Does it read okay?
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Post by White Satan on Dec 6, 2013 8:27:59 GMT -6
I'll come back to this after judging, promise.
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Angry Pete
Rookie
And the sign said long haired freaky people need not apply...
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Post by Angry Pete on Dec 16, 2013 9:14:33 GMT -6
Let's be honest. Both my opponents no-showed. Nobody read my RP.
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Post by BLAKE JONES on Dec 16, 2013 10:05:05 GMT -6
It's obvious that you must now massacre them with multiple lariats.
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Post by BLAKE JONES on Dec 16, 2013 10:19:43 GMT -6
Here's my feedback:
-First, I laughed so goddamn hard. Really funny CD.
-The character is very interesting, I'll tell you that.
-You know how to paint a scene with your words, I'll give you that.
-I really enjoyed the CD. It gave us an introduction to Pete and Howard and how they met. The fact that he was just some random hobo now being made a fuckload money off of by someone like Geese is interesting.
-Suggestion: Let Pete talk a bit more as the weeks progress. Show that he's finally getting comfortable here, even if he is just ranting about some random shit, like PB&J sandwiches.
Besides that, probably one of the best first RPs for a character I've read here.
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Post by The Cosplay Playboy on Dec 16, 2013 12:33:48 GMT -6
It's obvious that you must now massacre them with multiple lariats. No. Reppukens are the only acceptable form of punishment here!
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Angry Pete
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And the sign said long haired freaky people need not apply...
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Post by Angry Pete on Dec 16, 2013 22:50:39 GMT -6
It's obvious that you must now massacre them with multiple lariats. No. Reppukens are the only acceptable form of punishment here! Geese is too lardy to pull off any of Geese Howard's combos. Glad you liked it Blake. Link me via pm to an rp you want looking at and I'll review the favour.
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Brett Sands
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"Thank you, Based Kane." -Brett Sands
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Post by Brett Sands on Dec 16, 2013 22:53:51 GMT -6
No. Reppukens are the only acceptable form of punishment here! Geese is too lardy to pull off any of Geese Howard's combos. Glad you liked it Blake. Link me via pm to an rp you want looking at and I'll review the favour. If I ever post one in my feedback thread, go nuts.
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Angry Pete
Rookie
And the sign said long haired freaky people need not apply...
Posts: 21
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Post by Angry Pete on Dec 17, 2013 23:56:48 GMT -6
Can I get my scores PM'd to me please? xx
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Post by White Satan on Dec 18, 2013 0:32:17 GMT -6
I PM'ed my scorecard to you.
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