Post by Meatball-kun on Feb 23, 2014 1:01:33 GMT -6
Normally, I don't like fishing for feedback, because I'm always afraid it looks like some ego stroke or something. But since this is a new place, a new character, and a bunch of new faces I'm not used to working with, I'm very interested to know if I'm headed in the right direction. If this is the sort of stuff that turns everybody off my work, I'd rather hear it now and get to work changing my style and structure than continue to post garbage that nobody's interested in reading.
So, here are my thoughts at the moment:
1. I'm struggling immensely to find William's voice. I think I have a faint idea of who he is and what he's doing, but for some reason it's just not clicking. I say that, and yet the two people I've talked to have said "Yeah, I didn't notice that at all, he seemed very natural." But I don't know. I might be my own worst critic on that one. Curious as to whether anyone else was picking up on it. Like, did it seem like I was forcing the character, or did he seem like a "real" person, so to speak?
2. Sort of tying into the previous point: I'm very unsure as to whether tying Chuck to this story is a wise decision. I'm thoroughly convinced that Chuck is my most interesting character...so I guess on the one side, having him there serves as a sort of boost, since it's a character I'm very comfortable with, had a lot of success with, and has that nature that's just all-around "interesting." But there's also the fear that A. He might overshadow Darlington, who at the end of the day SHOULD be the focus of the story, and B. I feel like Chuck's run his course. So like...is he ACTUALLY beneficial to the story, or am I just looking for an excuse to make my favorite character relevant somehow? Still trying to figure out whether it was a good move to bring him into play.
3. Darlington's story as a whole. I mean...I feel like maybe the flashback sort of thing might be a bit far-fetched, or the police investigation angle is a little cliche. Then again, I've also heard that if it ties to the character or advances him in some way, there's no harm in doing it. So I'm not really sure how to take it. Part of me likes it, because I know how it ties in to current events. Part of me hates it because it's just so fucking odd. Interested to hear if anyone's got anything to say about that.
4. More than anything else, I'm curious as to whether this is the sort of shit that can fly in EXODUS. Like, hey, I'm just doing what I know best. Writing in a style that I'm used to, and I'm sure I've got a wacky way of coding things and wording things and whatever. In other places, that's worked like a dream. But this isn't other places, so I'm curious as to whether there was a crowd looking at it like "How does this guy expect to get anywhere if THIS is the sort of stuff he's posting?" If that's the case, then that's something I need to address, and something I'd like to improve on in the time to come. Best to start these things earlier than later, right?
So, you know...that's where I'm coming from as I'm asking you guys for any feedback. If any of you would care to shed some light on any of those points, I'd be very appreciative. Thanks all.
So, here are my thoughts at the moment:
1. I'm struggling immensely to find William's voice. I think I have a faint idea of who he is and what he's doing, but for some reason it's just not clicking. I say that, and yet the two people I've talked to have said "Yeah, I didn't notice that at all, he seemed very natural." But I don't know. I might be my own worst critic on that one. Curious as to whether anyone else was picking up on it. Like, did it seem like I was forcing the character, or did he seem like a "real" person, so to speak?
2. Sort of tying into the previous point: I'm very unsure as to whether tying Chuck to this story is a wise decision. I'm thoroughly convinced that Chuck is my most interesting character...so I guess on the one side, having him there serves as a sort of boost, since it's a character I'm very comfortable with, had a lot of success with, and has that nature that's just all-around "interesting." But there's also the fear that A. He might overshadow Darlington, who at the end of the day SHOULD be the focus of the story, and B. I feel like Chuck's run his course. So like...is he ACTUALLY beneficial to the story, or am I just looking for an excuse to make my favorite character relevant somehow? Still trying to figure out whether it was a good move to bring him into play.
3. Darlington's story as a whole. I mean...I feel like maybe the flashback sort of thing might be a bit far-fetched, or the police investigation angle is a little cliche. Then again, I've also heard that if it ties to the character or advances him in some way, there's no harm in doing it. So I'm not really sure how to take it. Part of me likes it, because I know how it ties in to current events. Part of me hates it because it's just so fucking odd. Interested to hear if anyone's got anything to say about that.
4. More than anything else, I'm curious as to whether this is the sort of shit that can fly in EXODUS. Like, hey, I'm just doing what I know best. Writing in a style that I'm used to, and I'm sure I've got a wacky way of coding things and wording things and whatever. In other places, that's worked like a dream. But this isn't other places, so I'm curious as to whether there was a crowd looking at it like "How does this guy expect to get anywhere if THIS is the sort of stuff he's posting?" If that's the case, then that's something I need to address, and something I'd like to improve on in the time to come. Best to start these things earlier than later, right?
So, you know...that's where I'm coming from as I'm asking you guys for any feedback. If any of you would care to shed some light on any of those points, I'd be very appreciative. Thanks all.