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Post by Deleted on Feb 18, 2013 21:50:27 GMT -6
Post a short little intro rp. Really wanted to do more trash talk, but am half out of it at the moment. I rp better with an opponent and really I do not want to pick a fight before my first match here rp wise so no point in singling or calling someone out. . Sort of a backstory rp.
Feels good to get in the flow of things again.
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Post by Andrew Ashton on Feb 19, 2013 1:38:02 GMT -6
Firstly, let me just say that I love the idea behind the character. Name wise without the mask, Jason reminded me of a nod to the Friday the 13th movies, Crowley to Alestair Crowley and Scarcrow to Batman.
I like the way you showed how the character is without me having to read his biography first. I'm a fan of characters with underlying problems and struggles.
I'll admit at first I was thinking "awesome, hopefully a super dominant big man!" and then saw that he's 5'6, but the more I've thought about it, the dominant characters tend to not come off well in efeds anyway, it's a bit disrespectful to let a character squash another if both handlers put in effort. So seeing him as a small guy, taking crazy risks just to hurt, I dig it.
More on the roleplay, the one thing I will stress is grammar. Sometimes what people were saying had no grammar at all and made it quite hard to find a real flow in their conversation or make the conversation seem "real" (rather than being read out by bad actors). I think if you cover that and put pauses in appropriate places then things would be even better.
So in a nutshell, I really liked what you put across, just fix the grammar issues and it would be even better. But for having been out for a while and needing to get back in to it again, good job dude.
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Post by Deleted on Feb 19, 2013 19:50:54 GMT -6
Thanks for the feedback. My grammar has always been a weak point for me and I need to work on it. Hope to get some more backstory added when I start to get matches with flash backs and the sort. I wish I was still in contact with the person who used to handle Beth Harte when I first came up with the character for a couple reasons. One I am not 100% sure about the cult demise of the cult Jason was in. Two the character has always been the bastion of sense and good for Jason and I want to use the character in rps and I would rather not use without permission.
About the character and size. I prefer my characters to be smaller. I think too many people want to be big unstoppable bad ass characters. I would rather be small with a lack of concern for my own safety. Big man vs little man stuff is also easier to write from a person who ran a fed and wrote a ton over my time. Also think that you see more little 5'6 people in my everyday walk of life than I do the big 6'6 or what have you.
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Post by Andrew Ashton on Feb 20, 2013 7:14:05 GMT -6
I completely know where you're coming from with the not wanting to use characters without permission, I'm in exactly the same boat. My advice would be to just go for it if they're a pivotal part of what you're doing and you're not going to drag them through the mud.
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