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Post by Dan Stein on May 13, 2013 3:13:57 GMT -6
Hey everyone! Just wanted to ask for some feedback from you guys. I understand that it's not in the same format as you guys are used to here, but I was hoping to get some content feedback. Any and all constructive criticism is GREATLY appreciated, as well as general feedback. I hope that it was up to your guys' (and gals') standards!
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Post by Deleted on May 13, 2013 8:23:45 GMT -6
You know, I liked it. As far as constructive criticism... flesh out your "scene setting" a bit more. The intro describing Dan was crisp though short, but the rest of the actions throughout were simple one liners... which is fine as you wind down, but it ends up making your total promo look more like a show segment than a promo. You want sizzle WITH the steak, (steak being shoot). I did like what you had though, so please don't take this as a "negative" feedback.
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Post by Dan Stein on May 13, 2013 15:55:06 GMT -6
You know, I liked it. As far as constructive criticism... flesh out your "scene setting" a bit more. The intro describing Dan was crisp though short, but the rest of the actions throughout were simple one liners... which is fine as you wind down, but it ends up making your total promo look more like a show segment than a promo. You want sizzle WITH the steak, (steak being shoot). I did like what you had though, so please don't take this as a "negative" feedback. Thanks! I realized there wasn't a lot of CD before I posted it; kind of wanted the shoot promo part of it to be the character development - wanted to Stein to talk about how Jerry was changing him but I understand you want a separate piece. I'll work on that on my next RP.
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Post by Dan Stein on May 16, 2013 19:10:33 GMT -6
Still curious! Sorry for the shameless bump.
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Daisuke Iwakuma
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Post by Daisuke Iwakuma on May 17, 2013 9:13:28 GMT -6
I told you how I felt on AIM. I tend to be more private about feedback to avoid sounds of bias.
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